Friday, July 30, 2010

Tonight

I cried tonight
I cried so softly, so gently and pure
I cried until my tears ran dry
My heart ached, and crushed inside

I died tonight
I died a slow peaceful death
I died until I could not breathe
My chest felt like I was suffocating

I left tonight
I left this world so swift
I left until I saw no more
My thoughts of this world hazing in bliss

I was born tonight
I was born to something new
I was born until I could not remember before
My life has just begun


-Originally written 13March03

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posted 11:41 AM
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4 comments:

  1. A. RobinJuly 30, 2010 at 1:23 PM

    I'm a fan of how you structured this poem! I love how you get at your point through the repetition.

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  2. rchJuly 30, 2010 at 4:12 PM

    Hey JRM I like the structure also and it's great how you evolve into something new at the end, very nice.

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  3. WeaselJuly 30, 2010 at 4:26 PM

    Very nicely written! The repetition really carries the poem, creating a solid structure. Great work!

    -Weasel

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  4. AnonymousAugust 1, 2010 at 8:27 AM

    wow!

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