Friday, August 13, 2010

Those Eyes – In Haiku

They draw me closer
Longing and lusting for you
I desire those eyes

Sparkling and shining
The way galaxies collide
Mesmerizing me

Look at me again
Until twilight I could stare
I get lost in them

Bright and beautiful
Blue, green, grey, brown, yellow too
Those eyes magnetize

Away I can’t look
They grab me and pull me in
Surging with passion

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16 comments:

  1. Excellent haiku! Great response to the prompt!

    -Weasel

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  2. So may well done Haiku in response to the prompt! Nice to have the opportunity to read your work.

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  3. Thank you! I chose to do 5 instead of 1 because 1 cannot possibly fully express my thought, and 5 is just enough to make me stretch and explore. I did 5 for my other haiku post today as well for the same reason. I think 5 it a good amount to allow for full expression of a thought.

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  4. It's wonderful to be so mesmerized. Well crafted piece.
    ~Brenda

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  5. Seconding what Brenda says. Well written....

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  6. Wonderful set of haikus..and I love your comment that five can make you stretch and grow, so important! Looking forward to reading your other set, now...

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  7. Your poem of haikus are mesmerizing! Wonderful for the prompt! :-)

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  8. I gave you one of my weekly Goddess Awards for this glorious piece. Come by to collect it anytime you want, if you want.

    Well done!

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  9. Wow! I love haikus! That was outstanding!

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  10. I came via Everyday Goddess. Well deserved award!

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  11. Thank you, all! It was a pleasure putting this together!

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  12. JRM,
    An emotionally,packed read.
    The eyes were central to your words.
    Best wishes
    Eileen

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  13. Hi JRM, this is awesome, the haikus flow together seamlessly into a really great poem.

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  14. Clever, blending haiku into something more. Nice job, JRM!

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